Suburbia episode 1

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Suburbia episode 1

Postby mercurygrandmarquis1 » Sat Apr 03, 2010 3:12 pm

Suburbia
Setting: Suburb outside a large city 2010
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"are you sure he didn't screw up the directions?" my friend Michelle asked. "yeah it should be" i responded. Michelle leaned against a parked police car as i asked an officer standing around in the lot where the auxilary youth vice squad was. the officer pointed to a small 2 story building at the end of the parking lot and said up the steps and knock on the door. Me and Michelle walked upstairs and knocked on the door. A voice called from inside said "im happy with my religion and no i don't want to buy anything". I said I was told to report here to an Officer McGrady. Enter said the voice.
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When we walked in we were gretted by Officer McGrady who had been expecting me. "so your the new udercover auxilary?". "yes sir James Russo" i replied and shook his hand. fill out this paperwork he said as he handed me a stack of papers. He looked at Michelle and asked who she was. she replied "Michelle Garcia". he gave her a look that said "where have i heard that name before?" After i filled out the paperwork and showed department and school ID to confirm that i wasnt a nutjob posing as a Underage Auxilary Police Officer. He noticed that i was a student at Winslow High School which was known for a high drug problem and said "your going to be seeing alot of action, how much experaince do you have?" "I have been an auxilary cop since i was 16 and when i turned 17 i was put through vice training and the instructor told me to report here". Ok I guess i should show you around. Kitchens over there bathrooms there and my office is behind that door and the garage and the vehicle sign out is downstairs, ok follow me and ill show you the garage and your car.
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"This is your car its a 2004 crown vic. I heard Michelle say somthing about it being a grandpa car. I saw you drive up in your car. Its the 1992 caprice right?" "yeah" i said. "so your used to big cars like this". "yeah" i said. ok come back tommorow at 4 and bring your program from school. As me and michelle left the police station she asked me to come to her house to listen to a song that she has written.
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We walked itno her house and saw her mother passed out on the couch with a half empty bottle of Vodka on the floor which was her way of self medicating after her husband was killed in the line of duty several years ago. When her husband was killed it destroyed the family. Michelle's mother had a self medication ritual which was drinking a bottle of vodka and passing out in front of the big screen. sometimes she added perscription painkillers to that ritual. either way she neglected her 2 daughters.
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We went upstairs and Michelle played her song on her guitar the lyrics were somewhat depressing lyrics so after she finished i asked her why it was so depressing. she looked at me and said her mother was getting her so stressed because she has to take car of her sister by herself and so i said to her calm down and relax. and that it was alright to be upset after all the things that have happened to her in her life
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ill handle dinner tonight i cant do this every night. Me and Michelle made dinner for all family members that werent passed out on the couch which was Michelle and her little sister Alexia. and before i left for the night they both thanked me and Michelle walked me to the caprice and looked me straight in the eye and said i really appreciate you being around since my father died.

End of First Episode
what do you think?
tell me whats good and tell me what sucked. keep in mind that im extreamly tired so cut me some slack
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Re: Suburbia episode 1

Postby crazyforsims2 » Sun Apr 04, 2010 7:40 pm

Honestly, I really liked it.


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Re: Suburbia episode 1

Postby SimKelsey9 » Sun Apr 18, 2010 12:32 pm

:clap: that iss great! Can't wait for the next!
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Re: Suburbia episode 1

Postby Joset » Mon May 17, 2010 7:16 pm

I liked it Merc, it has a lot of potential . :thumbup:
I was wondering do Michelle and Melanie know one another ?
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Re: Suburbia episode 1

Postby SgtCherryPopper<3 » Sun Jun 06, 2010 12:30 am

@ crazyforsims2

ok this guy really pisses me off...Dooes he know how hard it is to actually get these god forsaken characters into the right position...its all about timing...your lucky if you get them f**king sitting....it's like telling michael j fox with a sniper rifle to stop being michael j fox with a sniper rifle [insider with me and Merc] it's just not gonna happen
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